D#13, HW#5 -- Grammar assignment #6

HW#5

I focused on the "dangling participle" found on the copy blogger website. I also reviewed dangling modifiers on the purdue owl site. I think these are helpful to me because I often write as if I'm talking and misplace words.

Original:
Fetal death is also listed as a risk of having a baby at a later age in life. A study done by Ruth Fretts, MD; and Robert Usher MD state that “Women 35 years of age or older had approximately one in 440 births end in unexplained fetal death, compared to one in 1,000 births for women younger that 35.” What contributes to causes in fetal death are unknown; leaving the prevention unknown as well. Doctors can do advanced screenings and testing, but without any explanation or medical study there is no way to prevent fetal death.

Revised:
Also listed as a risk from having a baby at a later age is fetal death. A study done by Ruth Fretts, MD; and Robert Usher MD state that “Women 35 years of age or older had approximately one in 440 births end in unexplained fetal death, compared to one in 1,000 births for women younger that 35.” Causes in fetal death are unknown; leaving the prevention unknown as well. Doctors can do advanced screenings and testing, but without any explanation or medical study there is no way to prevent fetal death.